I was watching you. You were concentrated on those cards and that paper, where I've written all of the scores. I was winning this time for sure. You won't make me give up and you won't make me lose. No, not this time, sir.
'Drunk your wine?' You looked at my empty glass.
'Yeah...'
'So why are you quiet? You should have told me, that you want more!'
You took the bottle and filled my glass with wine. You looked annoyed, not because I was quiet, just because you were losing this time.
'Cheers?', you asked
'To?'
'To your victory.'
Oh, such irony in your voice. You have no idea how it hurts me.
I smiled at you. My smile was fake and you noticed that, still, we both were quiet. I've already raised my glass. I wanted to touch your hand, not your glass. At the last moment I thought...
What if I ...
There was a crash. I saw your facial expression when I 'accidentally' dropped my glass. You were so calm and mild, as if you expected this to happen.
Congratulations! It happened.
There were shreds of glass lying all around the floor. You looked at me and I looked at you. Unconsciously I bit my lips and looked down.
'Nine of hearts', I said
'Ten of spades. Leader.'
'King of spades.'
'Ace of spades.'
'Ace of hearts.'
'Damn...'
You took the whole heap of cards. Then you looked at me while I was putting my points down.
'Another 3 points?'
Yes. Another 3 points. But I keep silent. I don't want you to be angry. I want you to be vicious. I want you to shiver with anger.
I smiled back at you. I took my hair pin off. I wanted to feel free and evil. You made the music quieter.
'I don't like jazz anyway.'
I looked down at the shreds of my glass. Then looked up at you again.
'Six of clubs', I said and that made you angry.
'Ten of clubs'
'Six of diamonds'
'Ten of diamonds'
'Six of spades'
'Ten of spades'
'Ten of hearts'
'Shit... Damn you... '
You look adorable when you're angry.
I took the paper to add some points for myself. But you took the paper away from me, tore it into shreds and threw them all around the place. Then you took the cards and looked at them. You almost cried. I stayed put, not to interrupt your act of aggression. I loved it.
You threw those damn cards at the wall... But they fell down on the floor covering the shreds of glass and paper. You looked at me. You didn't like my calmness. You came closer to me. I went one step away. You were coming closer... Closer... Closer...
The wall. Nowhere to go. But I stayed so calm that you could barely breathe. You embraced me and kissed me. That meant much to you. But you saw that I didn't react so you let me go. You went and sit on the bed. And you started to cry.
You know that I think that only strong and passionate men cry.
I looked at you for a moment. I knew that you wanted me to come. So I took my hair pin and walked out of the room. You wanted me to look back.
No, no I won't do it.
I silently walked away. You looked at my fading silhouette then stood up to look through the window to see me, walking down the road. You took a deep breath.
***
And no one noticed the queen of spades lying on the table, smiling almost like Mona Lisa.
Friday, January 20, 2006
~*Playing Cards*~
Posted by Edyta at 10:23 PM
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Artur...
How can I beat you in poetry? :)
I'm more of a fan of ur mind ;) Thanx... :*~
Edyta, I've said all I wanted about Your story. Just want to wish You to be strong and believe in your abilities. As Artur, I believe in You. Just don't quit and give me pleasure of reading your stories and being Your critic! ;) Love Ya! You know that! =)*~ Maria
Thank you, Maria...
Well, you know me, being so emotional and all... Well, yeah I have my ups and downs, and I sometimes cry with no reasons (Idiot! :D) But...uh... Yeah... Thats why I need you... As the 'M' in MAJE and as my handsome hubby :D
Love Ya Too :*~
Soooa... i won't comment this story coz i already did ;P And actually i liked it as usually, u know. I like all your works, perhaps becoz of your original style :) They're always interesting and unpredictable.
I suppose i'll be buying your books in the future ;P
Gl, nice blog
HEY Edda...I wish to say u onething that this story is really romantic...You realy express the feeling very well in your story edda....i could really feel it....thanx for ur good stories...i feel really nice to read ur stories......and they are really special......I wish u would continue this good work......and beleive in ur talents edda....just dont get carried away by the critisism.....i know u have the potential and talent....So may god bless u.....HOpe u would write some more good poems and stories....and dont forget to mail me....bec i would really love to see that.....
Hello! *Waving*
Julka
thanxies... well-uh... u'd buy my book? seriosuly? whahahha :D dont forget to buy one for ur grandma, mother, father, brother, bf, another bf (can't pick just one :D, etc... :D i'd have a fortune :D ok, ok just kidding... thanx for ur supporort. sweet.
:*~ *Muah*
Sunder
i really donno how to tell how much excited i am to have this little piece of me online :D I surely look foward to write other stuff, only if u all read it :D I am so lucky that u always support me and that u always read whatever I write... And since I am writing I'd like to thank u for understanding me and always being there for me :D I'm not a present, I know :D :D :D Thanx!
hey :)
So what can i add? as I already said, you're writing is special in some specific way, dunno how to explain it. Serious and sometimes sad, that makes reading even more interesting :)
GL in your further writing :) I'll check it from time to time :))
Wiktor
Thank you, sir :)
No seriously... thanx a lot.
Yeah, check it out, be my guest...
I'm sure u will... U poor thing.... Do u have a choice? *viciuos laughter* :D
hehe, just make stories shorter :D
:P
They r not long.... The dialogs and empty spaces :P
Or maybe its you, who doesnt have time for this? ;)
Interests:I never shut up. Got a thing to say about everything.?? lol
wicked ; p
Mangue
cant hide the truth ;P
Mangue
cant hide the truth ;P? lol. hey, you're a dragon! lol...scary? just wicked = ). keep it up. TA. over n out you dragon! lol. keep up the truth, dish it out cuz we need it! muhahahaha. who's scary? ; D
mangue_chiquita
who's scary? ; D
Me!
What? Not afraid of me? muahaha :D
I would be ;P... a fire breathing dragon, btw... :D
Booya! ;D~
lol. you're wicked ; D. have you done that survey? if not, you should. luv to see you have a SCARY go. lol. do it!!!! lol
No, i haven't done it yet.... Lazy ass... :D but yeah, i enjoyed reading urs ;P
do it! lol
i adopted three pets! muahahaha lol
mangue_chiquita
i wanted to adopt a cat, a dog and a piggy.. Then thought.... Hmmmm one at a time ;P
BTW I spent some time teaching Scoobert how to headbang ;DD~
edyta! i took down my spider "duke" for now. you wanted to adopt all those? lol. i got greedy too and would have adopted 'em all ...what held me back? dunno, lol. you taught scoobert how to headbang? how cute, hehe. how? by placing the cursor over his head? lol. i'm a new parent ; D. i may need to be locked up for animal cruelty *angelic smile*. : P
mangue_chiquita
'i may need to be locked up for animal cruelty *angelic smile*. : P '
whahha... and i just need to be locked up. a threat to society :D~ lol
lol. edyta! you are funny lil thang. lol. fabbboooulllous. keep it up! you will be stalked! ; D. mmmmmm bird pie. lol. lick finger? lol
"whahha... and i just need to be locked up. a threat to society :D~ lol" ??? lol
scciety? or yeah, me too! this one is super cool. funny! keep it up. : D. i am honoured to stalked you, hehe.
mangue_chiquita
'mmmmmm bird pie. lol. lick finger? lol'
*drooooooling* ;DDDD~
lol
how about rabbit or frog pie?? lol
i just tried to feed scoobert...but he didn't like it. *cries* ;D. hit him. ;p lol.
mangue_chiquita
'how about rabbit or frog pie?? lol '
come to think of it, even ur nick sounds tasty.... yum yum ;D~
'hit him. ;p lol. '
scoobert, u bastard! go and apologise to Mangue!
Scoobert: Rorry... lol
ok, so i got carried away ;D~
lol. my nick?? mmmmm. mangue_chiquita pie. ya know what? mangue is mango and chiquita is banana, so i'd be a mango/banana pie. sound yuky or tasty? lol. oh man, me so hungry. i was gonna say that there's this hare/rabbit that comes by and i'd catch him/her for my super cool stalking victim, lol.
OMG, that's hilarious" scoobert, u bastard! go and apologise to Mangue!
Scoobert: Rorry... lol
ok, so i got carried away ;D~
lol. you evil master. i'm calling the animal cruetly police or whatever on you! lol. nah, scoobert is forgiven. he's too cute to hate for too long. btw, thanx for beatin him up...makes me feel better cuz i was gonna hit him myself. muhahahaha. me is pure evil.i better go now, hehe. ; D ;D. this place is hot!!!
mangue_chiquita
'so i'd be a mango/banana pie. sound yuky or tasty? lol.'
taaasty...*drooling*
'btw, thanx for beatin him up...'
yes! if someone hurts u, tell me. i'll run with a frying pan and kick the asshole on the head! muahahahha! (or i'll tell some of the servants to do it)lol
hehehe. oooh yeah. sounds quite tasty, huh? i'm hungry now. i'll get someone to make it for you and i but since you're the queen, you get more slices. *drools*
lol. run with a frying pan and kick the asshole on the head?? lol. fabulous. i feel so assured now. i'm protected by the best. tell some of the servants? sweeet. lol. ;D ; D.
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